I would grade this paper as a fail. I don't think the writer fully summarized the article. In the beginning the writer touches on some of the ideas but they seem to have missed the most important idea. The writer jumps between different ideas as well; first she is talking about modernizing then she jumps to media and obesity issues, then she concludes with modernizing. For there never being any mention about "modernization" in the article the writer seems to focused on that word, as though it is a key word.
There is no real personal or outside knowledge incorporated into the piece. The 2nd paragraph does bring some outside knowledge but I find it's relevance non-essential to the whole essay. The grammar/word choices seems to be lacking. They didn't capitalize company names and modernizing and mezmorizing(sic) in the first paragraph seem to repetitive. Missing some commas in key places. Organization problems are abound in this paper. The 1st paragraph seems to never want to end. Structure issues plague the paper as well.
Overall the writer seemed to have missed key points and missed the main idea from the article "Hype". There is a lot of work to be done to bring this paper to passing level. However, the writer did take a stance, though on two different ideas, and seemed to know where they wanted to go.
Monday, October 31, 2011
Monday, October 17, 2011
Revisiting Sondra Perl
Having read the piece "Understanding Composing" by Sondra Perl, I've discovered more useful information from her. In my initial posting I pulled out that the recursive process was the most important contribuition Perl had made to the theory of the writing process. Looking back now I feel the most important idea to me was her thoughts on "projective structuring".
I've often found myself writing papers or essays and thinking too much about the audience. I'm more concerned with shaping it towards the professor than to what I'm actually wanting to say. Often I've used this method because the topics don't interest me but I'm still trying to produce an "A" worthy paper. For the most part it has been a successful way to write if you determine success by grades. However, I've been left with countless papers and essays that I loathe because they don't really represent my own ideas or thoughts.
From the Sondra Perl reading I see that projective structuring shouldn't be the whole process but just a piece of the composing process. I must keep the audience in mind when writing because I'm not just writing for myself. However, the paper shouldn't be tailored made for a specific person and that is okay to put more of myself into the work. I plan to use this idea on any of my preceding papers to see if the quality, to me, is improved. It would make the whole writing experience, on the college level, more enjoyable if I have work that I could look back on with pride.
So I guess this is a retraction of sorts from my first post. Personally, Perl's biggest contribution to the world of writing is "projective structuring".
I've often found myself writing papers or essays and thinking too much about the audience. I'm more concerned with shaping it towards the professor than to what I'm actually wanting to say. Often I've used this method because the topics don't interest me but I'm still trying to produce an "A" worthy paper. For the most part it has been a successful way to write if you determine success by grades. However, I've been left with countless papers and essays that I loathe because they don't really represent my own ideas or thoughts.
From the Sondra Perl reading I see that projective structuring shouldn't be the whole process but just a piece of the composing process. I must keep the audience in mind when writing because I'm not just writing for myself. However, the paper shouldn't be tailored made for a specific person and that is okay to put more of myself into the work. I plan to use this idea on any of my preceding papers to see if the quality, to me, is improved. It would make the whole writing experience, on the college level, more enjoyable if I have work that I could look back on with pride.
So I guess this is a retraction of sorts from my first post. Personally, Perl's biggest contribution to the world of writing is "projective structuring".
Monday, October 3, 2011
Tutoring Do's and Don'ts
Tutoring Do's:
1. To be early is to be on time.
2. Give the tutee your undivided attention.
3. Be ready.
4. Act and look professional
5. Be attentive to the student and their concerns.
6. Make eye contact when talking with the student.
7. Stand tall, stand straight.
8. Get help if you don't understand something yourself.
9. Focus on the higher order concerns(HOC). Thesis, sentence development, and organization.
10. Get the student to talk about their issues with writing.
Tutoring Don'ts:
1. To be on time is to be late.
2. Don't be too personal; what you did over the weekend, who you are dating, your love life.
3. Dress super casual.
4. Have the work area covered in distractions; cell phones, food and drinks, anything that isn't student specific for that session.
5. Arrogance.
6. Be unfocused on the task at hand.
7. Be slouched.
8. Write the student's paper.
9. Focus all your time on grammar. The LOC's(lower order concerns) like punctuation and usage.
10. Get the student talking about their issues with life, you're not a licensed therapist are you?
1. To be early is to be on time.
2. Give the tutee your undivided attention.
3. Be ready.
4. Act and look professional
5. Be attentive to the student and their concerns.
6. Make eye contact when talking with the student.
7. Stand tall, stand straight.
8. Get help if you don't understand something yourself.
9. Focus on the higher order concerns(HOC). Thesis, sentence development, and organization.
10. Get the student to talk about their issues with writing.
Tutoring Don'ts:
1. To be on time is to be late.
2. Don't be too personal; what you did over the weekend, who you are dating, your love life.
3. Dress super casual.
4. Have the work area covered in distractions; cell phones, food and drinks, anything that isn't student specific for that session.
5. Arrogance.
6. Be unfocused on the task at hand.
7. Be slouched.
8. Write the student's paper.
9. Focus all your time on grammar. The LOC's(lower order concerns) like punctuation and usage.
10. Get the student talking about their issues with life, you're not a licensed therapist are you?
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